Rationale: Welcome to “Peer Review.” This presentation is designed to acquaint your students with the concept of peer review. This presentation will include the who, what, where, when, and why of peer review. The slides presented here are designed to aid the facilitator in an interactive presentation of the elements of peer review. This presentation is ideal for any level of writing, including freshman composition. This presentation may be supplemented with OWL resources: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/. Directions: Each slide is activated by a single mouse click, unless otherwise noted in bold at the bottom of each notes page. Writer and Designer: Jo Doran, 2007 Developed with resources courtesy of the Purdue University Writing Lab © Copyright Purdue University, 2007.

Other students, who are taking the same classes, probably think similarly to you. Therefore, they are good prospects for honest and helpful peer review feedback. Students also have to see their instructors as helpful peer review individuals… but students need to rely on people other than just the instructor. Encouragement by instructors, regarding the positive nature of in-class peer review, will help strengthen students’ acceptance of peer review. Students often ask roommates to look over their papers. This can be helpful, but more often it is best to encourage students to make appointments at the writing lab. Purdue’s Writing Lab is a very safe and helpful place to go with writing questions, needs, or just feedback.

Just like the ‘what’ of peer review, students need peer review at different stages of their writing. Students often think ‘revising’ means to edit: Fix grammar errors, correct spelling, etc. Earlier-stage peer review is a good way to help students understand revision and to see revision as more in-depth work. Peer Review is a good way to model the importance of audience awareness to students.

June 13, 2012 What do you think the word basiate means? (Do NOT use your cell phones to find the answer!!!) to prostrate oneself in front of a man to bask in glory the act of putting things into a basin to kiss the act of juicing a citrus fruit

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Verbs

Irregular Verbs Irregular verbs are verbs whose past tense and past participles do not end in –ed but are formed in a variety of other ways. As a result, they are often misused or misspelled. Review the forms of irregular verbs so you won’t make errors.

Irregular Verbs Irregular verbs that people confuse: to lie vs. to lay to sit vs. to set

Lay vs. Lie With a little help from Grammar Girl…

Lay vs. Lie Present tense: Lay requires a direct object Lie does not You lie down on the sofa.

Lay vs. Lie Present tense: Lay requires a direct object Lie does not You lay down a book.

Ways to remember… Lay it on me You are laying something (it, the direct object) on me. “Lay Down Sally” IS WRONG!!!! Should be “Lie Down Sally” “Lay, Lady, Lay” IS WRONG!!!! Should be “Lie, Lady, Lie”

Lay vs. Lie The past is trickier!

Past Tense The past tense of lie is lay, so… Last week, Steve lay down on the floor. The cat lay in the mud after it rained yesterday.

Past Tense The past tense of lay is laid, so… Last week, I laid the TPS report on your desk. Mary forcefully laid her ring on the table.

Past Participle The past participle of lie is lain, so… Steve has lain on the floor for days. The cat has lain in the mud for hours.

Past Participle The past participle of lay is laid, so… I have laid the TPS report on your desk. Mary has forcefully laid her ring on the table.

Lay vs. Lie Practice! Practice! Practice!

Sit vs. Set With a little help from Grammar Girl…

Sit vs. Set Set requires an object You set something (the object) down I set the book on the table. You can set a date.

Sit vs. Set Sit doesn’t require a direct object; it is something you do. I sit on the sofa.

Transitive Verbs Verbs which require an object are called “transitive verbs” Verbs which do not require an object are called “intransitive verbs” Transitive Transferring

How to remember sit versus set “Sit, Dude. Sit.” That is how you use sit—for the action of sitting

How to remember sit versus set Set requires an object I would set Dude’s leash on the table. She saw me set it down.

So remember… A dog or a person sits You set things (like leashes) down.

Practice In those days, Benjamin wrote all the music, and his sister sung all the songs. After she had eaten her bagel, she drank a cup of coffee with milk. When the bell rung, darkness had already fell. Voters have chose some new senators, who won’t take office until January. Carol threw the ball into the water, and the dog swum after it.

1. In those days, Benjamin wrote all the music, and his sister sung all the songs. A. In those days, Benjamin had wrote all the music, and his sister sung all the songs. B. In those days, Benjamin wrote all the music, and his sister singed all the songs. C. In those days, Benjamin wrote all the music, and his sister sang all the songs. D. Correct as is

2. After she had eaten her bagel, she drank a cup of coffee with milk. A. After she had ate her bagel, she drank a cup of coffee with milk. B. After she ate her bagel, she drunk a cup of coffee with milk. C. After she had eaten her bagel, she drinked a cup of coffee with milk. D. Correct as is

3. When the bell rung, darkness had already fell. A. When the bell rang, darkness had already fell. B. When the bell rung, darkness had already fallen. C. When the bell rang, darkness had already fallen. D. Correct as is

4. Voters have chose some new senators, who won’t take office until January. A. Voters chose some new senators, who won’t take office until January. B. Voters have chosen some new senators, who won’t take office until January. C. Both A and B D. Correct as is

5. Carol threw the ball into the water, and the dog swum after it. A. Carol threw the ball into the water, and the dog swam after it. B. Carol threw the ball into the water, and the dog swimmed after it. C. Carol throwed the ball into the water, and the dog swum after it. D. Correct as is

Paraphrasing Activity As a group, read the essay. Each group member choose a point in the essay on which to focus. Individually, write a paraphrase sandwich for the point you chose. Introduce the paraphrase Paraphrase with a proper citation Analyze/critique/comment on the paraphrase As a group, discuss each person’s paraphrase and decide how you might put the paragraphs together to build a critical analysis essay. Write an introduction and a conclusion as a group.

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“The Trouble with Organ Trafficking” General reactions What is Caplan’s thesis? Where does Caplan address his opposition? What are his counterarguments? Why does Caplan focus in paragraph 13 upon the core norm of medical ethics, “Do no harm”? What rhetorical techniques does the author use to dramatize the problem of trafficking in body parts and for-profit donation?

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Donation Free Write Would you ever donate or have you ever donated an organ? If you have not, under what circumstances would you? If you have, what were the circumstances? Would compensation factor into your decision? Would you ever donate or have you ever donated gametes (sperm or eggs)? If you have not, under what circumstances would you? If you have, what were the circumstances? Would compensation factor into your decision? 8:00 7:30 7:00 6:30 6:00 5:30 5:00 4:30 4:00 3:30 3:00 2:30 2:00 1:30 1:00 :30 :00

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How to peer review

Peer Review Looking at Texts from a Reader’s Point of View

Peer Review? What is that? Objective feedback Seeing someone’s text from your own perspective Explaining to them how you ‘see’ it Being kind, yet honest, in the process From Purdue OWL: Peer Review Presentation (http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/712/1/)

The ‘Who’ of Peer Review Who is the best person to review your writing? Peers… because they probably think like you Instructors… because they know what they hope to teach you Friends… because they can catch mistakes you do not see Tutors in the Porterville College lab or the Writing Mentors… because they are trained to work with writing needs From Purdue OWL: Peer Review Presentation (http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/712/1/)

The ‘When’ of Peer Review When does Peer Review work best? When you need overall feedback How does it sound? What do you think? Does it make sense? From Purdue OWL: Peer Review Presentation (http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/712/1/)

The ‘Why’ of Peer Review Why does peer review work? We see our writing ‘through’ another person We see how other students think and write We see others’ writing strengths and weaknesses We see new ideas and new ways of explaining ideas We learn to look at our own writing in a different way From Purdue OWL: Peer Review Presentation (http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/712/1/)

The ‘How’ of Peer Review Ways you can respond as a helpful reader: If you get confused or lost Mark in the text where you are confused Ask the writer to explain his or her ideas Ask the writer to explain his or her main point Ask the writer to fill in the blanks: My purpose in this paper is ______________. From Purdue OWL: Peer Review Presentation (http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/712/1/)

The ‘How’ of Peer Review Ways you can respond as a helpful reader: If you cannot see the point: Ask the writer ‘So what?’ questions. In other words, ask the writer ‘What does this sentence have to do with your main point?’ ‘What does this point have to do with this paragraph?’ ‘What does this paragraph have to do with the paper?’ Playing devil’s advocate Counter the writer’s stance or thesis Bring up other perspectives Ask the writer ‘why’ and ‘how’ questions Offer more examples and details to the writer Leave the final decisions to the writer From Purdue OWL: Peer Review Presentation (http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/712/1/)

Look at the essay in the book Compare revisions on page 102 with the questions on page 113

Peer Review Format Read your essay aloud. You are allowed to stop and write all over your paper. The rest of the group is not allowed to comment whatsoever (even after you are finished). Everyone reads aloud first. Decide which color highlighter will represent you in the group. Decide as a group how much time you have for each essay. Remember, you will need time at the end to discuss. Pass your essay and peer review sheet to the left. Peer review the essay in front of you concentrating on content, not surface errors. Highlight your comments in your color. Pretend the author of the essay is nowhere near you. All comments/questions/critiques should be written. Fill in the “Editor #1” section of the peer review sheet. Highlight your name in your color. Pass left again and repeat steps four and five using the appropriate editor section. Repeat step six. Review the comments on your essay and your peer review sheet. Make a note of any questions you have. Take turns being in the mush pot of your groups for a couple of minutes and discuss each essay.

Most Important/Interesting/Exciting Thing You Learned Today Verbs Paraphrasing in groups “The Trouble with Organ Trafficking” (reading and discussion) How to create an account with Turnitin.com How and why we peer review

What would you like to learn more about in the future? Verbs Paraphrasing in groups “The Trouble with Organ Trafficking” (reading and discussion) How to create an account with Turnitin.com How and why we peer review

Homework Essay #1 final draft is due Monday, June 18, at 11:55 p.m. to turnitin.com. Bring your rough draft, peer review, and rubric to class on Tuesday! Reading Journal #1 Read and annotate “The Gendered Language of Gamete ‘Donation’” on pages 313-318 Begin studying your grammar packet

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